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09 October 2008 @ 10:01 am
"Before Playing" on Flashshot  



I'm the featured drabble on Flashshot today.

http://www.gwthomas.org/flashshotindex.htm
 
 
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Michael Merriammmerriam on October 9th, 2008 02:10 pm (UTC)
nice!
Kenken_schneyer on October 9th, 2008 08:04 pm (UTC)
Thanks!
serendipity_50serendipity_50 on October 9th, 2008 02:14 pm (UTC)
I do believe I recognize that drabble. ;) Very nice. Congrats.
Kenken_schneyer on October 9th, 2008 08:05 pm (UTC)
Well, it's possible you do. ;) Thanks.
amamamaamamama on October 9th, 2008 02:44 pm (UTC)
Heh. I remember that one - and the conversation that followed. Oh, and regarding conversation - I've rebooted and for some odd reason can't get access to parts of my backup, so all my emails and addresses are gone... :( So - care to send me you address again? *hugs*
Kenken_schneyer on October 9th, 2008 08:06 pm (UTC)
Conversation on the other LJ, you mean? Yeah, that was pretty entertaining, in a racey sort of way. *hugs back*
amamamaamamama on October 9th, 2008 09:10 pm (UTC)
*sniggers* And I mean the email conversation We had. Which I wanted to give you a well thought out reply to, but...
Kenken_schneyer on October 10th, 2008 04:27 am (UTC)
So this means you can send that reply now, yes?
amamamaamamama on October 10th, 2008 06:41 am (UTC)
Yes, if you'll resend the last? There were some things I wanted to reply to, but I don't remember half. Stupid backup.
quasi randomkaolinfire on October 9th, 2008 05:37 pm (UTC)
Congratz :)

The flow of the dialog is perfect. Though I must admit I, er, don't get it.
Ken: Huxleyken_schneyer on October 9th, 2008 05:40 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I'll give you a hint. There's a slight editorial error -- the words "moving around" were supposed to be in italics. Does that help?
quasi randomkaolinfire on October 9th, 2008 05:45 pm (UTC)
I was strongly leaning Medusa (after reading the first half; though the first two lines I was thinking they were driving, so I'm ping-ponging a bit). But I don't know a connection with Penny, and the moving around implies that the hair would be stationary? I'd like to blame the coffee I haven't had yet, but I could also just be polishing a light on my ignorance. ;)

I also have a vision (from the lying on the hair and moving around) that the other speaker is much smaller than the hair-braider, but still don't get it. :/
Kenken_schneyer on October 9th, 2008 08:04 pm (UTC)
Hm, it may simply be that your experiences are different from mine.

The original draft contained the phrase, "she tells her husband," but I had to cut it for reasons of length. The pair are supposed to be a couple (either newlyweds or simply "recently together"), and she's teaching him to braid her hair. (Probably has to be a him, because a a lot of women already have experience braiding hair.) He wants her to engage in, um, an activity in which she would likely be lying on her hair and "moving around" at the same time. She's agreed, so long as he braids her hair first. Someone pointed out that "Before Playing" is actually a pun in this context, but I hadn't noticed it myself until after I wrote it. Very sensual activity, braiding someone else's hair.
quasi randomkaolinfire on October 9th, 2008 08:22 pm (UTC)
Hmm. A few things led me away from that (one being part of the tagline: genre). And that I wasn't picturing her between him when he was moving around on her hair (though with that framing, I do see how it can happen without her between, exactly, as well).

AHA! My biggest confusion, I think, was I was seeing the speaker telling the other person how to braid their own hair, and that turned who was saying what around a bit. It's the little things. ;) And come to think of it, I was screwing up the gender mix in my head (in parts it was her, and her, to me; and in parts it was her, and him).

Yes, I'll just blame the coffee now. That and struggling too hard to find genre in it. ;)
Kenken_schneyer on October 10th, 2008 02:07 am (UTC)
Ahhh, now I see. Actually, of the three drabbles I'm posting on Flashshot, only one ("Too Much Sense" (Oct. 27)) is genre -- although "Imagination's Curse" (Nov. 16) might be seen as genre if you're not too fussy. And I think there are quite a few others who post pieces that aren't strictly within SF-F-H.

It's interesting, but while short-story length fiction tends to be SFF, my drabbles often aren't.




moonette1: Remember Spartamoonette1 on October 9th, 2008 08:47 pm (UTC)
I got it on first read! I'm proud of that, because I can be fairly dense with clever things like this. Nice job!
Kenken_schneyer on October 10th, 2008 02:12 am (UTC)
Thank you! I figured you'd get it right off. ;)